The Fantasy, versions 1 and 2

The Fantasy, versions 1 and 2

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Brother Rufus McDougal shares part of his creative process. Sometimes a poem starts the the same way, but changes as the words flow. The difference between the two versions may be one word or a different last line. The ending changes alter the message or meaning, making them two entirely different poems in the end.  Here is an example.

The Fantasy, version 1

As I face the facts of life every day,
I feel that somehow it will all slip away.
As I care for the bruises of reality,
I fear the game is someone’s fantasy.
When the scores are added finally,
I will forever lose my life, my identity.
As a participant, I’m forced to play
a sport in which I question my destiny.

The Fantasy, version 2

As I face the facts of life every day,
I feel that somehow it will all slip away.
As I care for the bruises of reality,
I fear the game is someone’s fantasy.
When the scores are added finally,
I will forever lose my life, my identity.
As a participant, I’m forced to play
a sport in which I question my sanity.

Do you have a start of a poem, but the words just aren’t right? Go for help at the Poetry First Aid.

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